RG2E Featured Author Michael Scott Miller on “Why I Hate Writing Blurbs”

Happy Sunday, RG2E Peeps!

Please give a Big Ol’ RG2E First-Timer Shout-Out to Featured Author Michael Scott Miller, who’s chatting with us for the first time!!!

Take it away, Michael…

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For those of you unfamiliar with the term as it applies to novel writing, the blurb is the brief description that goes on the back of the paperback version of a book.  More importantly, though, it is what a potential reader sees when shopping online for books.

At its most basic, the blurb is supposed to be a teaser, a 50 to 100 word lure to get readers interested in reading the other 60,000 to 70,000 words in the novel.  And that’s precisely where it breaks down for me.  In the math.  I simply struggle to distill 60,000 carefully chosen words and phrases that I’ve poured into a novel into what amounts to a sound bite.  When I sit down to write blurbs, they a) come out superficial, b) give away too much of the story, or c) both.  Here’s why.

My stories aim to get readers engaged with the characters.  That’s hard to capture in a blurb.  How does one get a reader emotionally invested in 100 words?  I see where the blurb works in an action story:  U.S. and Soviet intelligence agents race to locate a Soviet submarine as it attempts to defect to the west and bring with it a trove of military intelligence.  Or maybe:  Man-eating shark stalks idyllic New England town and scares the bejesus out of its residents.  But in a character driven story? Not so easy.

I also hate giving away any of the story.  There’s no double standard here.  I feel the same way when I’m reading.  I don’t want to know before beginning the Hunger Games that Katniss will be forced to represent District 12 in a brutal game created for the amusement of the Capitol.  I don’t want to know that the guests invited to the island mansion in And Then There Were None are going to get killed one by one. That doesn’t leave much uncertainty about what’s going to happen next until pretty darn close to the end of the book.  Unless something is going to happen on page one, I just don’t want to know about it before I start reading.

As a writer, I feel like I’ve made every scene in the story important, every word, every utterance.  Okay, so maybe that’s a bit overstated.  But still, I’m supposed to filter this thing down to 100 words?

I’m almost embarrassed to admit that I’ve spent hours and hours working and reworking my blurbs.  At times, it feels more difficult than writing the book itself.

So with this background, I am presenting to you the two blurbs for The Book of Sylvia that I finally decided were good enough to see the light of day.  The first is the original, and the second is the new and improved version.  Or is it the other way around?

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On Amazon

B&N Nook

Kobo

Smashwords

$2.99

In any case, let me know what you think and I’ll gift you a free copy of the book for your Kindle through Amazon (to at least the first 50 of you).  I promise you’ll like the book.  It’s this cool story about a London prostitute and a priest in rural England who try to solve a mystery and learn a lot about themselves along the way.

Original

Under suspicion of abetting a robbery, London streetwalker Sylvia Smith doesn’t know where to turn. Frightened and alone, she arrives on the steps of St. Alban’s church, where she meets Father Christopher Fosberry, a priest consumed with self-doubt as he struggles to resurrect his dying church. Together they set out to recover the stolen money, following a cryptic clue whispered to Sylvia by her client as he was taken into custody. They quickly find themselves drawn toward one another by a mutual sense of despair and a desire to help the other. But Sylvia soon discovers that the more she guides the priest, the deeper she drives a wedge between the man and the church.

New

Unwittingly pulled into a high profile crime by her client, London call girl Sylvia Smith doesn’t know where to turn.  Frightened and alone, she seeks solace at a rural church, where she meets Father Christopher, a priest consumed with his own set of struggles. Father Christopher takes her in, reluctantly, but is soon drawn into Sylvia’s obsession with the cryptic message that the client left behind. In this journey of self-discovery cloaked in a mystery, Sylvia and the priest grapple with the police, their demons, and temptation.

I look forward to hearing from you!

~~~ Michael

About Michael:

Michael Scott Miller works with numbers by day in the business world and with words by night. He began writing shortly after graduating from the University of Pennsylvania and has had his work published in the Welcomat (now Philadelphia Weekly) and wrote music reviews for the Wharton Journal while his wife was getting her degree there.

He has written two novels, Ladies and Gentlemen…The Redeemers, and The Book of Sylvia, both works of contemporary fiction with strong emphasis on their characters.

Miller grew up in Cherry Hill, New Jersey and now lives in Lafayette Hill, Pennsylvania with his wife and three children.

Connect with Michael here:

http://www.michaelscottmillerauthor.com/

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Fabulous scoop here, Michael! Welcome to The RG2E and thanks bunches for the Ebook Gift Copies!

Writing Blurbs is actually one of my fave things to do. Okay…writing the high concept/movie pitch version of the blurb that is. For example, I write things like: Hell’s Kitchen mixed with Meet the Fockers – or – Will and Kate gone Bond, James Bond…Under the Tuscan Sun – or – Castle and Beckett gone country with a bit of Bewitched tossed into the barnyard.

I start with those high concept pitches and then draw out my paragraph blurb from there.

I luuuvvv both of your blurbs, btw, and would love to see what your high concept/movie pitch would be…

The Best of RG2E Reading Wishes — D. D. Scott, RG2E Founder

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21 thoughts on “RG2E Featured Author Michael Scott Miller on “Why I Hate Writing Blurbs”

  1. As a reader for me the blurb is kind of what hooks me to the book:) Your book sounds excellent and I would love a copy for my Kindle please! Enjoy your day!
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  2. I prefer your original blurb. It seems to draw me into wanting to read the story more than the second. I guess it tantalizes the senses just a little more. I would love a copy for my Kindle. christygibbon at juno dot com

  3. I like reading the blurb… It’s kinda a make or break for me with making my mind up on buying a book. If it really hooks me, more times than not i’ll end up buying that book.

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  4. Hello,
    I can appreciate the incredible effort “the blurb” must take.
    You have all ready put so many words to use to tell your story.
    Both of your “blurbs” catch my attention.
    I would love to read the entire book.
    Thank you.

  5. I read both blurbs a couple of times. The first one gives a little more information to the reader and the second is a bit more obscure. In this case, I like the second blurb. It doesn’t give anything away. I would love to read The Book of Sylvia! My email is kfdailey@triad.rr.com

  6. I have the exact same feelings about blurbs, Michael. I, too, have spent hours writing and rewriting one for my mystery with romantic elements and an inspirational theme. How do you get all of that in under 100 words? And not give away too much, but enough so that you don’t get 1 star reviews because the book isn’t what the reader expected?

    I think both of your blurbs have strong points and weak points. I like the opening sentence of the first version, but the closing sentence (mostly) of the second. I’m not sure about the “self-discovery” part because that makes the book sound more like a literary novel than a mystery. I think the first version makes the romantic attraction clearer. I’d combine the two:

    Under suspicion of abetting a robbery, London streetwalker Sylvia Smith doesn’t know where to turn. Frightened and alone, she seeks solace at a rural church, where she meets Father Christopher, a priest consumed with his own set of struggles. Father Christopher takes her in, reluctantly, and is soon pulled into Sylvia’s obsession with the cryptic message that her client left behind. Drawn to one another as they work to recover the stolen money, Sylvia and the priest grapple with the police, their demons, and temptation.

    Not perfect, but I think it gives you an idea of the points I’d like to see. Now if I can only get mine right!

    I own a Nook, so if you can send me that version, I’d be happy to read your book. Thanks.

    • I like it! Thanks for the feedback and taking the time to craft what may wind up as blurb #3. I think the corollary to blurb writing is that it’s easier to write someone else’s than one’s own. I’ve found myself able to bang out what I think are decent ones by editing others’ attempts on Kindleboards. Not being burdened with knowing the entire story seems to help. I’ll get a Nook version out to you shortly.

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